tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post1017254503160393329..comments2012-03-17T15:33:25.039-07:00Comments on Less Poetry, More Stuff.: A PromiseBP!http://www.blogger.com/profile/02989288225758881596noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-14640069500769362672010-05-04T08:00:20.625-07:002010-05-04T08:00:20.625-07:00Very beautiful words! I am glad I followed you her...Very beautiful words! I am glad I followed you here from here:<br />http://williamm51.blogspot.com/ <br /> You are very talented. When read these lines I had to do a double-take on your age. <br />“I'm not used to losing,<br />But my history it haunts me”<br /><br />GerardineAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-19537866316098715842010-04-28T20:16:57.755-07:002010-04-28T20:16:57.755-07:00Great work. :-) Keep working towards your dreams, ...Great work. :-) Keep working towards your dreams, Brend!Jai Anthonyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14178133768531022292noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-51494916303852007792010-04-28T20:05:57.118-07:002010-04-28T20:05:57.118-07:00Love it.
One of the things I would encourage you ...Love it. <br />One of the things I would encourage you to do 9as you write) is play with what you have written - take out the articles look at the verbs and their synonyms<br /><br />what I love about writing is it's playing with words<br /><br />moondustwritermoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-78776361742303048322010-04-28T19:28:34.224-07:002010-04-28T19:28:34.224-07:00Nice piece.
I liked the way it flowed. Smooth and...Nice piece.<br />I liked the way it flowed. Smooth and pleasing over the tongue. :)<br />Keep writing. Because it is always good to write a little something, at least, each day.<br /><br />Visit some of my new postings at:<br />http://authorofworlds.blogspot.com/<br />Stop by, and let me hear your thoughts.<br /><br />-BrennonAuthor of Worlds - Brennon ThompSonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16727465620862709906noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-85220602041231714532010-04-28T19:09:18.553-07:002010-04-28T19:09:18.553-07:00This is awesome, no seriously. I LOVE it, it's...This is awesome, no seriously. I LOVE it, it's sweet and romantic, but if Castle were to write it (I just see it being his POV) it would also be so heartbreaking. <br /><br />If you don't mind, I'm going to post this on my LiveJournal (katherynmae.livejournal.com) so share, but all credit goes to you!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4492360732547506586.post-40242633885087095032010-04-27T21:58:21.779-07:002010-04-27T21:58:21.779-07:00I really enjoyed the repetition on this one. My on...I really enjoyed the repetition on this one. My only thing is, the line, "I'm not used to losing," within the rest of the stanza confused me. Other wise I really enjoyed it. It's a cool piece.trevorhoenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12269654143336401370noreply@blogger.com